Sunday, January 26, 2014

The song I hum

The Mill, 1964, by Andrew Wyeth


A man spying on a window open to my soul
can read  much of who I am,

but will he peek long enough to ever figure me out?

Does he see through the furniture and walls
for a better grasp of the big picture?

Will he get close enough to learn the song I hum?

(Shared with The Mag and The Imaginary Garden)

28 comments:

  1. Sounds as if you WISHING he will lsten to and learn what and who you ARE...
    Sometimes--if it is wished--one might consider tiny bit of aggressiveness?
    I LIKE
    "Short-and-Sweet"
    Hard to beat!

    My father would say,"like relative's visits..."

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  2. He will! Man will always strive to test his resolve to the fullest. He'll hear the humming! Nicely Kenia!

    Hank

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  3. close enough to hear your song. I like that.

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  4. Is it always the same song? Mine change quite often, more than once a day. I have no idea of why they change. That is literal.
    Now; I have learned the song that Mrs. Jim sings, it is a lovely song, naïve and trusting.
    ..

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  5. a song that everyone should hum

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  6. Windows still exist in walls. Now, if he had a door...

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    1. The door is there Karen, it's open, he knows it, still he hesitates. And by hesitating he makes me feel bad about myself sometimes. :/

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  7. Say hello to the man in black for me !

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  8. Oh, that last question is the best! In these days, I think people are constantly seeking to be entertained by other people's lives, yet hardly bother to get to know the people they 'spy' on.
    Well said, Kenia.

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  9. Some even get close enough to give you a song to hum, but I agree, looking through the window only takes you so far. A marvelous little piece, Kenia.

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  10. given time and patience....yes! Lovely poem.

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  11. Questions from the view...love the concept.

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  12. He'd have to be the man you want at the window and not a stranger peeping Tom! But then, window open and door cracked, maybe the answer is "no." I feel the longing in this sweet little poem.

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  13. good theme to this poem... looking through a window won't let you see the real person...

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  14. The metaphor here is drop dead gorgeous! Love this.

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  15. Your teasing questions..just add the flame in the fire...:)

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  16. Beautiful...so much expressed in so few words.

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  17. Few words but a lifelong wish portrayed. Wonderful.. I like this very much.

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  18. Yearning and the next painful notch past wistful, but yet short of agony. ~

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  19. If he's the right one, he will hear the song and sing along!

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  20. You create an introduction, arc of drama and the ultimate challenge, leaving the reader wondering, hoping. Good writing, here.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2014/01/27/red-pajamas/

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  21. Oh yes, he will. Your writing commands it be so .....

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  22. Delightful! Deepness with a light touch. I really love the opening. :)

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  23. Let's hope, you creative darling!

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  24. I hope he never figures you out. If he does, the mystique is gone. We all need a little. Lovely work!

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  25. Some even learn to sing the harmony…or at least, to make a good attempt.

    ;)

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  26. This was beautifully succinct. You know, there are some that will hum, sing & dance along too! It takes some a little longer than others! Maybe you could share your written word with him too ... might give him a little prod!!

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