Sunday, February 23, 2014

if I cried tonight, what would it be about?

of the life we lead:
the love I could not seed
or the one I've put on hold?

of final conversations:
the words I successfully bleed
or the ones which rest untold?

of the people we meet:
those who were mild and sweet
or those who shook my world?

of the paths we miss:
the dreams they could well feed
or the ones I'd chase, fool's gold?

(shared with The Imaginary Garden)

(as you may well have noticed, I have problems rhyming but now and then I insist on trying)


  1. rhyme, ew. Just joking.

    the one put on hold.
    the words you successfully bleed,
    the ones you'd chase, fool's gold.

    Love you.

    1. It's a mystery to me where the strength to bear you comes from. lol

      Love you too. :*

  2. This really resonated with me, love that second stanza.

  3. of the people we meet:
    those who were mild and sweet
    or those who shook my world?

    How true! They come in various types and sizes and can sure influence us. It's a question of meeting their challenges and not to let them shake our world. Wonderful write Kernia!


  4. I think you have a wonderfully light touch with the rhymes of this poem. They seemed to lift the end of each line and impel the reader on to the next - it is very lyrical and introspective.

  5. I agree with Kerry's use the rhyme and the inherent brevity to lead us through this work. It retains a lightness of approach that contrasts so with the content. A great dynamic if it can be done right, as it's done here. Very nice job.
    Steve K.

  6. Beautifully written.

  7. this is a wonderful write in all it's sweetness and regrets.. the sorrow of life can have the softness of black velvet.

  8. I think this is wonderful. The near-rhymes are just as effective as precise rhymes, even more so because they convey accurate meaning. Well done, Kenia.

  9. the sweet ones and the ones who rock your world... are all part of the mosaic of life...

  10. Anonymous2/24/2014

    I can't a favorite verse, each is strong. but those final conversations, the ones I have in my head... ~

  11. I live the title. Seems like sometimes tears need to flow. These are all tender and worthy reasons.
    I truly enjoyed this read.

  12. Anonymous2/26/2014

    Very beautifully wistful.