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| The Mill, 1964, by Andrew Wyeth |
A man spying on a window open to my soul
can read much of who I am,
but will he peek long enough to ever figure me out?
Does he see through the furniture and walls
for a better grasp of the big picture?
Will he get close enough to learn the song I hum?
(Shared with The Mag and The Imaginary Garden)
Sounds as if you WISHING he will lsten to and learn what and who you ARE...
ReplyDeleteSometimes--if it is wished--one might consider tiny bit of aggressiveness?
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"Short-and-Sweet"
Hard to beat!
My father would say,"like relative's visits..."
He will! Man will always strive to test his resolve to the fullest. He'll hear the humming! Nicely Kenia!
ReplyDeleteHank
close enough to hear your song. I like that.
ReplyDeleteIs it always the same song? Mine change quite often, more than once a day. I have no idea of why they change. That is literal.
ReplyDeleteNow; I have learned the song that Mrs. Jim sings, it is a lovely song, naïve and trusting.
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a song that everyone should hum
ReplyDeleteWindows still exist in walls. Now, if he had a door...
ReplyDeleteThe door is there Karen, it's open, he knows it, still he hesitates. And by hesitating he makes me feel bad about myself sometimes. :/
DeleteSay hello to the man in black for me !
ReplyDeleteOh, that last question is the best! In these days, I think people are constantly seeking to be entertained by other people's lives, yet hardly bother to get to know the people they 'spy' on.
ReplyDeleteWell said, Kenia.
Some even get close enough to give you a song to hum, but I agree, looking through the window only takes you so far. A marvelous little piece, Kenia.
ReplyDeletegiven time and patience....yes! Lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteQuestions from the view...love the concept.
ReplyDeleteHe'd have to be the man you want at the window and not a stranger peeping Tom! But then, window open and door cracked, maybe the answer is "no." I feel the longing in this sweet little poem.
ReplyDeletegood theme to this poem... looking through a window won't let you see the real person...
ReplyDeleteThe metaphor here is drop dead gorgeous! Love this.
ReplyDeleteYour teasing questions..just add the flame in the fire...:)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...so much expressed in so few words.
ReplyDeleteFew words but a lifelong wish portrayed. Wonderful.. I like this very much.
ReplyDeleteYearning and the next painful notch past wistful, but yet short of agony. ~
ReplyDeleteIf he's the right one, he will hear the song and sing along!
ReplyDeleteYou create an introduction, arc of drama and the ultimate challenge, leaving the reader wondering, hoping. Good writing, here.
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Oh yes, he will. Your writing commands it be so .....
ReplyDeleteDelightful! Deepness with a light touch. I really love the opening. :)
ReplyDeleteLet's hope, you creative darling!
ReplyDeleteI hope he never figures you out. If he does, the mystique is gone. We all need a little. Lovely work!
ReplyDeleteSome even learn to sing the harmony…or at least, to make a good attempt.
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This was beautifully succinct. You know, there are some that will hum, sing & dance along too! It takes some a little longer than others! Maybe you could share your written word with him too ... might give him a little prod!!
ReplyDeleteOh I do hope so!
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