we kept secret after
growing up and apart.
Because they were
so dear to our hearts
they became treasures.
My most painful cry still
dwells on the very corner where
you announced you were leaving.
I never watched the stars
or the city lights with anyone else
from our spot.
I visit it occasionally and
you might be glad to hear that
birds live in our place now.
Someone planted a tree there
and its undisturbed shade
reminds me of your arms.
(Written for the Imaginary Garden Sunday Mini Challenge)
Each stanza is more achingly beautiful than the last. The secret place known only to lovers, kept in a still and tender place in the heart.
ReplyDeleteMy most painful cry still
dwells on the very corner where
you announced you were leaving...
These lines really touch me, because I have felt that pain a long time ago.
so touching Kenia.......loved it so much
ReplyDeletesweet yet full of sadness...however there's some comfort in the arms of Nature reminiscing of happy moments...
ReplyDeleteThis is so poignant and so quietly, reflectively sad,Kenia--eloquent with the secrets of our heart that perhaps we can only whisper to the page in poems like this...just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThis just gets better as it goes along, Kenia. I was hooked at thye second stanza, but the way it unfolds about the birds and the trees and the exclusivity, despite time and separation....well, it is just so you and so good.
ReplyDeleteYep, this is woven perfectly together, so even-handedly in so many textures. Amen.
ReplyDeletevery warm and loving.
ReplyDeleteA progression that really goes from a burning loss into a kind of solace with those branches at the end.. There is a gentle flow in this like a brook flowing out into marshland...
ReplyDeleteSuch painful beauty in this...to return to a place of memories and listen to secrets you will never speak...I love the ending
ReplyDeletethe secrets of lost love. YOu've treated this topic so perfectly - well done.
ReplyDeleteThe first is always the hardest ......
ReplyDeleteI would love to hear you read this ~
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